Be Honest Old Man

I’m aware that my voice and English are still far from good, but it would be a waste if something that you’ve written no one read it, so here it is.. the song that I wrote “Be Honest Old Man”.

Please feel free to correct my grammar

Lyric:

Sitting an old man with a fragile heart by the windows pane

washing away all of his sadness into the pouring rain

should I sing for him, should I dance with him

Hiding an old man with a fragile heart in the coffees cup

lying about how he’s really love those evening rain

should I talk to him, should I say something

can I talk to him this way

be honest old man

be honest old man

be honest old man

be honest old man

be honest old man

be honest old man

be honest old man

be honest old man

then I will sing with you

then I will dance with you

then I will sing with you

then I will dance with you…

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25 thoughts on “Be Honest Old Man

      1. Yaaaaa.. padahal mau ngajak duet maut hihihihihihi….
        Okay ditunggu Candy mengambil alih kekuasaan πŸ˜‚ dan ngajak Candy nyanyi bareng πŸ˜€
        Nanti ya Chris request-nya sedang dipertimbangkan soalnya masih grogi di depan kamera πŸ˜‚

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  1. Kata guru les toefl saya, Mas: Verb-ing without to be isn’t a verb. Jadi yang line 1 dan 3 menurut saya boleh di-re-order kalimatnya jadi “an old man sits with a fragile heart by the window’s pane”. Soalnya kalau tetap begitu, an old man seolah jadi object, padahal dia subject kalimatnya. Menurut saya sih begitu Mas… cmiiw lho ya :hehe
    But I honestly think that without applying those so-called advice, your lyrics have quite delivered the meaning to the listeners. Furthermore, I think an artist’s creativity should not be heavily restricted by grammar, although it’s quite important, too :hehe

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    1. Thanks Gar, ini juga proses belajar, melalui proses seperti ini kayanya lebih cepat nangkap dan tahan lama, sebenarnya juga tidak mau membutakan diri atas nama sebuah karya seni. Jadi sebisa mungkin selama maksudnya masih bisa dimengerti kesalahannya diminimalisir πŸ™‚

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